Yumbo-Yak's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Forgiveness]

this is goodnessforgumpasho!

Whatever tha hell that means this is hot, u done came up playa!
I'm proud of this ya heard?

Keep it pimpin'

Lil-Saynt responds:

thanks man im tryin man im tryin!!! n its good to see u back cuz!!

b ezy bruh
~1~

[My first (remake)]

Good, but u still got a way to go pimpin'

It's good, if i may make a few suggestions though

1. Make da track den make tha lyrics
if u make the track first u know the melody that u have to go on for ya lyrics, then it won't sound like a poet, it will sound like a rap.

2. Try to keep ur voice clear and at the same level.
Always when u make a vocal track, try to keep ur vocals louder than the music, if u keep it at the same volume, and then bring it into fl as a channel u have total control over the volume of that precise channel.

that is pretty much all u have to work on, like i said before it sounds like a poet who doesn't have to stay on beat, but i don't think that is what u want...

Keep it Pimpin'

Broken-Needle responds:

Thxs 4 pointin out da flaws man,but like i said b4: i made both of em (beat, lyrics) seperately n i jus wnted 2c if dey sounded good 2getha, wen i heard em 2getha it sounded hot but i didnt notice the flaws that u mentioned b cause i was stunned of how hot da track sounded so i put it up on ng n den noticed dat i rhymed way 2fast 4 da track, anyways thnxs 4 da time dat u put in on writin da review n thxs 4 da review aswell n also thnxs4 not hattin,
Keep it pimpin (aka: Peace)

[Broken Needle]

good but u need some work

Homie u got potential, first u need a beat dough! this was coo' as a first submit, but next time i want to hear a beat, hell if u like mine u can use any one of em! seriously just put my name in da comments, that's all i ask

This was coo' dough, i want to see u get better homie, keep it pimpin'

Broken-Needle responds:

thxs 4 da rev man n 4 da permission 2 use yo beats, im looking forward 2 makin a rap on yo beats man ( i jus lots o colab requests so my hands r full right now but assoon as im dun i will make a hot rap 4 yo beat), anywayty 4 da rev man
Peace

[Only 1 bullet left]

sorry bruh.

The vocals were too loud, and muffled like u were too close, like u were right up on it, The intro was slammin dough, the intro was hot.

In Fl on the top right hand corner there is a button that reads fx
push it and a window will open up, in that window there is a vertical bar that goes from green to yellow to red, if at any time your track goes into the red, it's too loud, your vocals would have gone to the red.

the transition from the intro to the actual beat, was horrible, the actual beat didn't fit the feel that the intro put out(to me) and there was no kind of transition, the intro stopped, and then a totally new beat started

I would honestly like to hear a redone version, simply make a transition from the intro to the beat of the song, and tone ur vocals down, if u bring the vocals in as a channel that is as simple as turning it down, try getting farther from the mic but raising your voice a bit, and that will take care of that problem.

Keep it pimpin', and get ya foot out ya ass.

Broken-Needle responds:

yah i tried 2 make it loud cuz my 1st was 2 lowso yah, yah i kno bout da bar ting n ima get a pop shield 2 deal wit da muffled ting, i wuznt realy sure how 2 make da transition right. n wut u mean by "and get ya foot out ya ass"??? anyways thxs 4 da rev
Peace

[Halloween(06)]

Tis the season, for frights!

This was a good track, but it sounds like a hip hop track, not very scary, and not very halloweenish...
although, it has a dark feel to the song, which is nice, Come and check out my halloween songs, It was gettin' late so i had to come back to them in the morning, it was just kinda creepy at night while i was tryin to mix(lol) u'll see what i mean
Still a good track none the less.

Yumbo-Yak

DjTeChniQue responds:

thxs for ur review.( hip hop track, not very scary,) this is the hip hop section of ng lol jus gave it a dark feelin like u said . but uhmm yea thxs

[- Hieroglyphic Immortality -]

Keep it pimpin'

The intro was good, it sounded like an actual egyptian song, I can say dat wit confidance cuz i got some egyptian friends and they always got me listenin' to some of it
keep it pimpin'

p.s. I put a halloween song up yesterday, The intro is completely creepy u know what i'm sayin', it got alot of samples in it so it is somethin' different.

P.s.s I got a major idea for a beat boxin' track, keep on da look out, when i finally put it up, the beat boxin' will be my own.

Greeksta-69 responds:

alright man il keep a look out and keep checking my stuff out in starting to step my game up big time so keep a look out thanks for the review

[Happy Birthday To You]

that was nice

It sounded really good, really crisp, really real.

I have a b-day song too, come check it out

Yumbo-Yak

speedmetalmessiah responds:

Thanks man I'll check it out in a minute.

[- Drifting Away -]

another fine work by greeksta

this is coo' it's a laid back track, I think i'll get like 20 of my peeps together and we'll all jump da weed man and have a field day!

Greeksta-69 responds:

ahaha sound good man thanks for the review and we gotta do this collab some time man it will be good okay man peace for now

[An Upcoming Demo]

Buzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

Get rid of that buzz add some more guitars, a little variation on the drums and u got gold!

I read u use FL studio
If u put that guitar in as a channel, u can have that particular channels volume turn all the way down when the buzz starts, just a suggestion.

Stealth-Emergence responds:

hmm I might have a try at that, though someone suggested a soundcard issue I'll look into that see if I can run my guitar Through FL, so far I've only been using FL for my drums, and have only used it on one track so far "Drwon in the fountain of youth"

Glad you liked it and thanks for the review!

Peace Out!

Stealth

[Drown in the fountain of youth]

love the title.

The song does the title justice
It sounds like an old black and white move when u stand over the fountain, and oh look, someone pushes u from behind, that was great, keep it up

Stealth-Emergence responds:

Thanks! man glad you liked it

Your stuff was cool too!

Thanks for your review

Peace Out!

Stealth