u still need some work...
I was readin' ur other comments to ur reviews, so i am going to write this just to write it, as always its gonna be what u need to do to become better, i know from readin' that it was ment to be what it was ment to be, however i mention something that u'll look at and it will be like, dude, i didn't notice, or something, u feel me.
n-e way, The echo u added to ur voice, can be a good thing or it can be a bad thing, use it the right way, and it can add so much to a track it ain't even funny, but be careful, it could equally spell disaster for an otherwise pimpin' track.
Like i said in my other ones, u sound like a poet
and there really wasn't much of a beat to go on, i can tell u got potential wit all if ur openings, unless the entire openings r samples u find from somewhere, u got that skill to make a good beat, listen to some of my halloween openings, they r samples but there r like 10 different samples i mesh together to make it sound as one.
Your metronome(tha clap), if u make a beat first and keep the metronome at a steady pace, it will be easier to make a rhyme.
And last but not least, If u listen to Lil-Jon ever, u know that nigga be yellin' and shit...U think when he in tha studio recordin' that the yellin' he be doing, matches exactly wit dat track at da correct volume every time? Hell no, he edits his voice, volume wise, to not overpower da track, and not to be swallowed by tha track
ur tracks sound like ur up on da mic, whisperin' or somethin', if u got tha sound guard, or whatever, let loose man, talk louder, yell, do what u have to do to get ur voice recongnized, and not to have it distorted, get back from da mic and talk louder. I want to hear u man.
n-e way, thats the just of it, come check me out i got some new shit, u know what i'm sayin'
Keep it pimpin'